Wednesday, April 8, 2009

Sultana

Surely sugar
She sweetly said,

Solemnly smiling –
She submitted herself
To his shame,
his secrets and sin –

She was his
Symbol,
His
Sacrament,
sketched into his soul

She swayed with him
In a sorrowful symphony –
His sneer
From under the sheets
Saluted her surrender
Her sacrifice of self

She seemed
Blissful,
simply -
her!
Subconsciously,
She swayed another
Stirring within
something sinister,
slithering,
hissing
with self-reproach
remorse…

Surreal
shine sun
spilled over the horizon

and sunk in the sea.
Serenity -

Slowly she swayed
Somewhere, somewhere

10 comments:

  1. Wow, this is great! All those S sounds sound like a snake hissing. Even the shape of the poem resembles a snake! Love it!

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  2. Love the S's and the title is really cool!!

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  3. Nice work - it's a lovely piece. I particularly like the repetition of somewhere in the last line - it takes on a life of its own.

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  4. Simply stunning.
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  5. thank you everyone for your comments are very much appreciated, just coming out of my writing hibernation and happy i was not laughed off the website :)

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  6. quite intriguing! and all those S's keep you on the edge. lovely.

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